day tripper

Ahh that was so good! I loved how detailed it was, and how it was mysterious yet revealing all at the same time. Good Job!(:

I'm new to the site and I just read your story and it has me completely mesmorized. I'm excited to day dream about it, if that doesnt' sound strange what ...

I really liked it! I can't wait for part two(: My only comment is that, when you have the talking, maybe make a break inbetween them, as if starting a ...